Dear Shanik Alvarez,

Overall your argument was well put together, I liked the way you used your evidence then tied it all back to your claim that supports the increase the positive representation of minorities in the film industry. The way you described how the representation the minorities do get often misinterprets them. The sources that you have chosen have really supported your claim and made an impact on how effective your argument was. I would like you to include where you got the percentages of representation of minorities. The points you are very persuasive and are easily understandable.The point that you made where it talks about the way that minorities are being inaccurately portrayed and that often makes a bad impression. Your argument was well made and there weren’t that many mistakes that were in your paper.

Sincerely,

Kendry Ortiz